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Some people think young people are not suitable for important positions in the government，while other people think it is a good idea for young people to take on these positions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The folk deem that
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 aren’t qualified to be in charge of political duty, while others consider that age is not the main factor but ability. In
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 will discuss both sides of
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 issue and conclude by giving my own point of view. On one hand, since the adolescents are young, they may have limited experience.
Although
 they might graduate from
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 or have remarkable master’s
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, the lack of experience in
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 field might lead them
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improper
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decision
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which
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 may hurt the country or even make the whole society rebellion. What’s more, little experience is likely to make a reckless decision, which means it’s better
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lead them and give some objective advice.
On the other hand
, people may say that it is important to give younger counterparts chances, and
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 may have several reasons.
Firstly
, for those who
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 prospective and creative ideas for the nations, it may bring some unexpected positive stimulation toward the country, which is unlikely to be seen from those conventional senior governors.
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, adolescents are willing to accept
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 point of
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 from various parties which provide the society
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more democratic and harmonious country. To conclude, whether youth should take duty in the city hall is a
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 sword. I personally think it’s worthy to give them a try,
however
, the young potential should be supervised by the elders in some condition.
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