You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while your are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this fiend. In your letter: -give details of your study plans -explain why you want to get a part-time job -suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Anne, How are you? I hope

this

letter finds you well. As you already know, I am planning to attend my Master's degree at Queen's College in London. I am excited that my course starts in April

this

year. Having said that, I am

also

anxious about expenses during my

study

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, as things are relatively expensive in London. I'm wondering if you could help me find a part-time job there and get some references for the job, so I can cover my personal expenses. My course will take approximately two years to complete. The classes will be normally held on weekdays and I will be free on weekends. It would be a great help if you could introduce me to any part-time job available around the University area and look for the classified section in the local newspaper. I would really appreciate your help and support. Thank you in advance. Best wishes, Naomi Umami

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task response

The letter contains all the required details about study plans and the reason for seeking a part-time job. Good task response.

coherence and cohesion

The logical structure of the letter is clear and the tone is suitable for a formal letter. Improve the greetings and closing to make the letter more polite and friendly.

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

6 paragraphs

155 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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