In the past, people used to travel abroad to see the difference from their home country. However, the sceneries in places all around the world seem more and more similar nowadays. What are the causes of the similarities? Do you think the advantages of these similarities outweigh the disadvantages?

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Global tourism

upsurged

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has increased

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during the

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two decades and people rushed to exotic cities to enjoy

unique

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the unique

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features of those places and appreciate the

architects

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and sceneries.

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, tourist destinations, in most parts of the

world

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, are becoming similar

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compromising their unique cultural and structural features. Globalisation and

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the advancement

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of technology, in my opinion, are the

reason

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behind

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. Globalisation has unified the

world

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in many different aspects. The same architect is designing the buildings in the US

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in Europe and Asia. Construction materials for infrastructural development are

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the same. So it is obvious that those buildings look alike.

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, technology has enabled people to learn about foreign cultures and adapt to them pretty swiftly.

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, unique cultural hallmarks are becoming less obvious

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the

world

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is embracing a similar lifestyle, food

habit

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habits

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, fashion and technology.

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is why a teenager in Tokyo follows the same fashion and style

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teenagers from New York.

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MacDonalds

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McDonald

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, KFC and Pizza Hut are

popular

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as popular

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in Bangkok as they are back in California. Tourist attractions cannot escape from

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sweeping trend and

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why Kuala Lumpur is not much different than Beijing or Hong Kong.

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phenomenon might seem advantageous to some, but, in my opinion, disturbing and dangerous for cultural identity and global tourism. People may already have sacrificed too many of their cultural identities despite agreeing that our unique culture is our most treasurable heritage

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supposed to be passed on from generation to generation. Personally, I would not like to travel thousands of miles to land in a city that looks just like mine. So similarities among cities will not benefit the global tourism industries. In conclusion, we cannot deny the effects of globalisation and how it connects the

world

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. But when it comes to preserving our unique cultural identities and planning our cities, we should be more of a nationalist than a global citizen. Post navigation

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Ensure that your essay directly addresses all parts of the question by clearly presenting the causes of the similarities in tourist destinations and weighing the advantages and disadvantages of these similarities.

coherence cohesion

You have a clear introduction and conclusion. However, it is important to maintain coherence and cohesion in the body paragraphs by using suitable linking words and organizing information in a logical manner.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

326 words

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Fully explain your ideas

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