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In Order To Solve Traffic Problems, Governments Should Tax Private Car Owners Heavily And Use The Money To Improve Public Transportation What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

#traffic #governments #tax #car #owners #money #transportation
Road
traffic
 congestion is one of the serious
problem
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problems
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conserned
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concerned
 by the authorities and it can
be sort
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 out by increasing
tax
 for domestic vehicles meanwhile by using that
tax
 amount, make public transportation more developed.
This
 essay will discuss
about
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both
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pros
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prons
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pros
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 and cons of
this
 solution. To commence with, imposing
high
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a high
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 levy on
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 eventually decine private wheels on road resulted in
reduction
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a reduction
the reduction
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 of
traffic
 problems.
In addition
 to
this
,
environment
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environmental
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 pollutions
such
 as air pollution ,sound pollution etc. will be less.
Also
 by reducing motor vehicles we can preserve our oil resources.
For example
,if ten
people
uses
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 bus
instead
 of
thier
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their
 own vehicle for going to office
miminum
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minimum
 30
liters
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litres
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 of
feul
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fuel
 can be saved and
atleast
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at least
 one
percent
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per cent
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 reduction in
traffic
 blocks. So for restricting vehicles on road , imposing high toll is one of the considerable methods which
authorites
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authorities
 can adopt. On the other side, introducing
high
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a high
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tariff
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tariffs
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 to private
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 affects only
below average
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below-average
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people
. A large group of
poeple
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people
 who is using
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 every day can
affored
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afford
afforded
high
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a high
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 toll and they will definitely continue the same.
Mean while
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 the other small group will suffer.
Ownering
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Owning
 a private
car
 is a necessity
now a days
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nowadays
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 because of
this
 fluctuating climate like high temperature with high humidity, heavy rain etc and imposing
high
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a high
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tax
 on cars will
definitly
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definitely
 affect
below average
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below-average
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 group of
people
 who are already using private transports for their day to day life.
For instance
, in
canada
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Canada
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private
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a private
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car
 is not a
luxuary
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luxury
 it's a necessity there because they have eight months of snown fall and
on
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 that time
its
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 very difficult to manage
their
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apply
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without a
car
. So inducing
high
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a high
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 levy on
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the car
a car
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car
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cars
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 will affect common
people
 very badly. To conclude, for regulating
traffic
 blocks , inducing high
tax
 on cars have
lot
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 of positive sides and negative sides.
This
 essay discusses the good aspects like reducing
traffic
, controlling pollutions, etc
andon
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and on
 the other hand it affects poor
people
 who eagerly wanted to buy a
car
 of
thier
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their
this
 own and
people
 living in highly fluctuating climate zone.
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