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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In today's environment, finding
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well-paying
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 is a contentious issue. Some people assume that having a good education is the only way to get a high-paying
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.
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 another group of thought believes that having
experience
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 is the best approach to
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 a high-paying
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. Let’s discuss
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advantages
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 and disadvantages
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 views. Many university or college students who have completed their undergraduate or postgraduate studies obtain a high-paying
job
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. Because they've developed and mastered their craft. They learned about the talents and
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 in college.
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, they became experts at it. Many businesses have employment openings that require highly qualified candidates. Charted accounted at the beginning level,
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, for a software developer. Regardless of
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, they only hire those who are extremely qualified and skilled. People,
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, feel that someone with
work
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experience
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 can find a well-paying
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. Because there are many positions that demand merely
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 and are well compensated.
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 means that
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experience
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 improves a person's efficiency and management skills.
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, a company's CEO or management level requires an experienced individual at all times.
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,
work
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experience
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 earns you a well-paying
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. In
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, I believe that high salaries are earned by
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 highly qualified and experienced employees.
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,
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, necessitate skills and mastery. People should have mastered their skills, regardless matter how seasoned or highly qualified they are.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Highly qualified
  • Well-paying job
  • Securing
  • Knowledge
  • Expertise
  • Higher positions
  • Higher salaries
  • Practical skills
  • Real-world setting
  • Employers value
  • Professional connections
  • Ideal
  • Industry
  • Job role
  • Opinion
  • Experience
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