WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING TASK 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three

types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts indicate the proportions of three types of
nutrient
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nutrients
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in typical meals, which can be unhealthy if consumed too much.
Overall
, the three types include sodium, saturated fats and added sugars. The data is taken from the United
states
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of America.
According to
dinner, sodium and saturated fats are the highest amount, which
are
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43% and 37%, respectively.
While
added
sugar
is just 23% in dinner.
Moreover
, added sugars have the lowest level of three nutrients in lunch In the first pie chart, it can be seen that sodium
are
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the
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same proportions in both breakfast and snacks.
In addition
, saturated fat which is in breakfast has the same
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percentages
percentage
percendages
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percentage
with
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added
sugar
by
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16% in the same meal
However
,
most
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nutrient in snacks is added
sugar
, which is around 42%. In the other words, the percentage of added
sugar
in snacks is more than twice as much as saturated fat in the same meal.
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