WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts indicate the proportions of three types of
nutrient
in typical meals, which can be unhealthy if consumed too much.
Fix the agreement mistake
nutrients
Overall
, the three types include sodium, saturated fats and added sugars. The
data is taken from the United states
of America.
Change the capitalization
States
According to
dinner, sodium and saturated fats are the highest amount, which are
43% and 37%, respectively. Change the verb form
is
While
added sugar
is just 23% in
dinner. Moreover
, added sugars have the lowest level of three nutrients in lunch
In the first pie chart, it can be seen that sodium are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
same proportions in both breakfast and snacks. Change preposition
in the
In addition
, saturated fat which is
in breakfast has the same Correct your spelling
percentages
percentage
percendages
Correct your spelling
percentage
with
added Change preposition
of
sugar
by
16% in the same meal Change preposition
of
However
, most
nutrient in snacks is added Add an article
a most
the most
sugar
, which
is around 42%. In the other words, the percentage of added sugar
in snacks is more than twice as much as saturated fat in the same meal.Submitted by belleyuykb on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the seventh paragraph.
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