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the number of both male and female students according to six subjects of their studies at UK university in 2011.

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The bar chart illustrates the information about the
number
 of both male and female
students
 according to six subjects of their studies at UK university in 2011. In general, it is apparent that English language and literature, communication and media studies, and linguistics are popular subjects among male and female
students
.
Moreover
, the English language and literature have the biggest
number
 of both genders. The proportion of females was the highest at 250
students
, while the
number
 of males was around 230
students
.
In addition
, Philosophy has the least
number
 of male
students
, which is 50, whereas History and Archeology have the smallest
number
 of female
students
, which is around 120.
Besides
, for Art and Design, the proportion of male
students
' enrollment exceeded the proportion of female
students
 by approximately 20
students
. In conclusion, it can be seen that the
number
 of female enrolled
students
 is higher in comparison to male
students
 across five out of six subjects.
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