A friend of yours is thinking of going to a camping holiday for the first time this summer. He has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friends. In your letter, Explain why you think your friend would enjoy camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go on camping with your friend this summer

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Dear Michael, I hope there will be everything fine. It is an amazing idea to go out

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camping

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this

summer. It is one of the most adventurous

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to do in your life. You would be glad to know that

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year in summer I did camping with one of my friends near Shimla. If you are thinking of camping, I guess you would

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to enjoy

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a lot. Camping itself is the best experience for everybody. You could enjoy

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lot there because it will take you

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closer to

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nature. At night time, you can observe the freshness of the air as well as the noise and pollution-free environment. It exactly feels like you are on a totally different planet. There is no doubt about the enjoyment and excitement of camping but you should

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remain alert and safe. There are certain types of risks are involved while camping as

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totally new to us. There could be some insects, snakes and lizards which can be proven dangerous. As camping can be done in remote areas so you should try to have at least a couple of friends with you. If you don't mind I can join

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you as I have

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some experience of camping which could be beneficial for you. Cath you soon to get ready for summer camping. Yours lovingly, James.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

235 words

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