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Most employers nowadays put increasing emphasis on social skills. Some people believe that cocial skills are important in addition to good qualifications for job success. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Recently more
people
 focus on social
skills
 for what purposes.There are those who say that social
skills
 are
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crucial extra
qualification
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qualifications
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 for success. I strongly believe that these
skills
 are really necessary to stay in a good position in the workplace. In
this
 essay, I will examine my point of view. Perhaps, the main reason why I am in favour
with
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this
 phenomenon is that many companies find out
such
 employees who have good communication
skills
. these types of
people
 have great self-confidence to communicate
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receivers
recievers
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.
for example
, in sales and marketing related jobs, employees should have self-dependence to persuade customers by giving
advertisement
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advertisements
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 about their products.After that,their profit will be increased when the number of
customer
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customers
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enhanced
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.
Moreover
, in multinational jobs,workers have to communicate with foreigners.In
such
 cases, face-to-face contact
are
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 more crucial. Another reason why I agree with
this
 statement is that satisfactory
behavior
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 plays an important role in the job area. In
extended
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 industry,
people
 work in a team and have a leader.If
leader
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 and employees do not treat each other very well ,the project cannot be finished
with
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successfully .
for instance
, in it related job, a whole project cannot be completed by
individual
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 very early.
Furthermore
 ,they solve it with 12 and 14 workers. In that case, acceptable behaviour can make a good relationship and energetic.
In
addition
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 one can share
problem
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the problem
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 with others if another person
behave
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 very well. to sum up, presently
people
 cannot do anything very well because of the lack of social
skills
. if
people
 have these
skills
 like communication
skills
 and good behaviour as well as academic
skills
.they will achieve good things in the professional life
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