Some claim that men are naturally more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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century, people are extremely competitive and are willing to do whatever they want in order to win. Generally, males are more aggressive and own a natural competitive mind, compared to females. The actions of men's hormones and a desire to show victory stand as the primary reasons behind
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of all, the universe has designed the prominent male hormones as an intense material. To be specific, they possess a special ability that boosts a particular boy's competitive skills.
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, in a study conducted by Havard University in the U.S.A, it was found that there are substances responsible for triggering stubbornness and competition in testosterone, the main male hormone. Unfortunately, girls lack
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they do not gain many competitive skills.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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