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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart below illustrates the
percentage
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 of
water
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 used for different purposes in North America, South America, Europe,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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. In general, the
percentage
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 of used
water
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 has been classified into 3 different categories, industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 and domestic
use
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. In the category of industrial
use
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, North
Africa
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 and Europe have the most
percentage
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 among the other 4
areas
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 which is 48 per
cent
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 and 53 per
cent
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 respectively.
However
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,
in
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apply
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other
areas
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such
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 as South
Africa
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,
Africa
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, Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 has the least
percentage
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 of
water
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 used in Industrial.
In addition
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, there are four
areas
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 that have the most perc
entage
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engage
 of
water
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 used in agriculture in these three categories, 71 per
cent
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 in South America, 81 per
cent
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 in
Africa
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 and 84 per
cent
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 in South East
Asia
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. Among them, central
Asia
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 has the biggest
percentage
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 with 88 per
cent
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 of the
water
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 that has been used in agriculture.
However
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, the category of domestic
use
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 has the smallest
percentage
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 in most
areas
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 compared to industrial
use
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 and agricultural
use
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. Interestingly, the
percentage
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 of domestic
use
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water
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 is 2 per
cent
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 higher than industrial
use
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 in
Africa
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 and central
Asia
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, water, africa, asia, use, areas, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • water consumption
  • agricultural, industrial, domestic
  • usage patterns
  • developed vs developing regions
  • irrigation systems
  • climate factors
  • percentage breakdown
  • water management
  • sustainability
  • residential water use
  • efficiency
  • charts comparison
  • water-intensive
  • water scarcity
  • resource allocation
  • desalination
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