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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is clear that infrastructures are soo important for any
country
 and deciding how much money and how to investigate that can be a controversial subject. Presently, railways play a key role in every
country
's economy because most of the goods and resources can be moved safely and fast to any location in the
country
. Some people believe that
trains
 are the best mean of
transport
both
 for people and resources.
For instance
, in World War 2
trains
 were served as the best mean of
transport
 for supplies. I subscribe to the notion that using
trains
 are
also
 cheap.
On the other hand
,
trains
 cannot support all kinds of needs in transportation so we need other means of transportation
such
 as buses, ships, planes and so on.
Therefore
 we need to regularly update and improve other means of transportation too. In my view, countries should have a plan to investigate
both
 of them. Consider a
country
 with a great railway system but poor public
transport
 or opposite of that. None of these
transport
 means
cannot
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can
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 fit all the criteria to have 100
percent
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per cent
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 efficiency.
Also
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,Also
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 we cannot use
one
 particular meant of
transport
 on every site.
For example
, we cannot use
trains
 in mountains or remote cities. Sometimes,
one
country
 has developed a
railsway
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railway
 system and is poor
in roads
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inroads
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 so they should put more money on building more roads and it has it is own problems but we are not going to talk about that in the essay. In conclusion, public
transport
 is important as well as a train because as I said we need
both
 to different goals and we should put money equally on
both
 of them unless
one
 of them is not developed as the other
one
. My main point is we should have a balance between them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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