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Some people think that there are things individuals can do to help prevent global climate change. Others believe that action by individuals is useless and irrelevant and that it is only governments and large businesses which can make a difference. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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Some are of the view that individual efforts for reducing global
climate
change
 can ensure good results, yet others believe
that is
 insufficient and nonsense,
that is
 achievable solely with the
governments
 and big companies helps. In my perspective,
although
 each small step is precious to tackle
this
 issue, the authoritarians like
governments
 and responsible companies can do something in order to make a
change
. On the one hand, it is a known fact that human activities affect the
climate
 in a plethora of ways, so truly changing one's habits about the approaches in the environment can provide to decrease the effects of
climate
change
 to some extent. People by trying to be a less harmful impact on nature, the rate of disaster can decrease in the years ahead. Another potential measure about lessening the effects of the human race can be decreasing the overconsumption of natural resources.
On the other hand
,
climate
change
 is an unsurmountable challenge,
therefore
 actions for its serious impacts can be done by the
governments
 and big businesses hands. To reach a target, there are many urgent needs
such
 as legislating some environmental laws and making more environmentally-friendly investments.
Governments
 by making some drastic changes in laws can help to prevent bad decisions to a great extent. As for big businesses, they can fund new investments which are much more convenient and less harmful to our environment.
Also
, they may publish programmes to raise public awareness of the global issue. In the conclusion of
this
, despite the people's steps cutting back on
climate
change
,
governments
 and companies' measures can create some straightforward solutions for
this
 issue.
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