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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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increasing
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the increasing
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 world, high income is
signification
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 than getting
satisfy
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satisfied
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. But some people prefer satisfaction
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 much money. I strongly believe that if we do not satisfy our
job
, we will have
a
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regret
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 the end of living.
First
 of all, we all need a lot of
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money
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 for living. So we should work
a
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for a
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company that
it
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gives us
big
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 salary.
However
, we should not forget our
job
 satisfaction. Some employees ensure to your workers to live
compeletely
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completely
. It is
good
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point
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. On the one hand, we always must feel life enjoyments.
Therefore
, we have to find our lovely professions. Every employer has
a
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satisfaction from his
job
. One of the solutions, we must teach to choose the professions to every human in childhood. A person who likes his
job
 never regret his
job
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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