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Some educationists say that a child should be taught to play a musical instrument. Do you agree ot disagree

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Some teaching experts say that all
children
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 must learn to play musical
instruments
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. I strongly agree with
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 idea because
music
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 is able to help
children
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 for creating inventions. According to the experts' opinion, our schools pay attention to teaching
music
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. But entire world's schools teach more mathematics, biology, chemistry, physics than
music
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.
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, more and more parents think that there is no benefit from
music
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. So they desire their child to be a mathematician or doctor.
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, some parents want to teach their generations.
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, one problem is that they cannot pay money for their
children
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's courses and musical
instruments
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.
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,
music
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 assists
children
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 to relax.
Children
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 will not spend their time to useless exercises
,
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 if they learn to play
different
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 musical gadgets. Various
instruments
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 help
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the humans
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humans
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 body.
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, the piano and violin calm and encourage humans' nerves. In conclusion, there are various
children
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 and parents who do not like to learn about musical
instruments
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. So every child selects appropriate lovely study.
Music
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 can assist to choose it.
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