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Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#people #boys #girls #schools #benefit
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Generally, education does not separate different mindsets as long as students are within the same school. The
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' specific traits in
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 case,
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 do not have a major impact on the process of education, which will not affect much of one's mindset when it comes to the profession and academic proficiency of any field and subject.
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, there are
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advantages
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 and disadvantages to
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 of the views mentioned earlier. Starting with the
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-separated
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, with boys being in their separated
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 and so as the girls. The advantage that it may bring is the significant reduction in the risk of sexual abuse or molestation, due to the separated
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 nature of the
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, which reduced their instinct or demands of sexual needs.
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, due to their lack of direct interactions with the opposite
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, getting to know or understand each other's nature can be a very tough task to carry out for
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genders
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, which will affect
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 sides' socializing skills due to not knowing well the basic characteristics of the opposite
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. More or less, it
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 drops their confidence upon encountering their male counterparts While being in a mixed school does the opposite function and
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, increases the risk of sexual abuse or
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, the rate for
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genders
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 to interact
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 dramatically rises, which leads to better socializing skills for
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genders
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. Being in a mixed school will most likely build your confidence towards more kind of people and
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, to their opposite
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.
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, they will have more
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 when it comes to approaching different subjects and majors of study. To conclude,
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 views given have their respective
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 and disadvantages, but while the mixed
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 bring more risk of unwanted situations, it
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 brings you more
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 to approach much likely everything and renders your confidence a little bit more. Personally, mixed
schools
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 are the winners.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • co-education
  • gender segregation
  • peer pressure
  • academic performance
  • gender stereotypes
  • discrimination
  • social skills
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
  • diversity
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