You have organised on 19th birthday party for your relative and invited elderly gas. It was a successful party. Write a letter to the hotel Manager, to provide the feedback: in your letter, you should tell: - when the party took place - why it was successful - thanks for staff member who was really helpful.

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Dear sir I hope you are well and as well as your all

staff

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members

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are

also

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good. A few days ago on 28th February 2022 my grandfather's 90th birthday so we planned to organise a

party

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. My big brother suggested your hotel for

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party

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which is located on 150 ring road Rajkot. It was so a beautiful event for all of us and your hotel is decorated by your

staff

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Moreover

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, it was a successful

party

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that days because my all family

members

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are getting together met on

this

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occasion and

also

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we invited a friend who is old people the same age as my grandfather. I organised a music

party

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with it and

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welcoming to all people but there was a special famous singer was accidentally came there

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the

party

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was outstanding.

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, all

staff

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members

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are politely communication with all people and their service was very good and I think without your

staff

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member's help we cannot organise a successful

party

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Finally

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, I thank you and most of your all

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members

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, they give me a good suggestion for a better

party

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which was more helpful for us and I would like to especially thank for

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party

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all of the

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. Yours Faithfully Vikram

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

212 words

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