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You are the assisstant coach for the football club in your town. Write a report of The Imperial hotel

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The purpose of
this
 report is to give you information on the Imperial
hotel
 and its price, location and whether it has
sports
facilities
 that the football team can use.
To begin
with
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 I am staying in the Imperial
hotel
 and the room for two is costing 40 dollars per night. The
hotel
 has a restaurant and a
3 course
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3-course
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 meal suited for the football team cost around 20 dollars per person. The cost of using the
sports
facilities
 is included in the price for the room.
Secondly
, the location is in central London very near where the tournament is hosted. The
sports
facilities
 are
in
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 the perimeter of the
hotel
.
Furthermore
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 the
sports
facilities
 are made two years ago and are fitted with all the new tech. It is perfect for any weather because it is heated in the cold and ventilated in
the
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hot weather. In conclusion, the Imperial
hotel
 is a perfect match for the needs of the football team. And it fits in the budget
,
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 because it is not expensive considering what it has. The location is
also
 close to everything. We should use the
hotel
 in March.
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