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As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element of individual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction? How realistic is the expectation of job satisfaction for all workers?

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In modern life, the majority of
adult
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 spend most of their time
to earn
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 enough money to meet their daily needs. So that, the employee’s emotion about the job
also
play
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 an important role in affecting the
people
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 health both physically and mentally. There are many aspects that participate in comforting the staff at
work
 and whether adults really enjoy their
work
 or not
that
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will be discussed in
this
 essay. In fact,
the
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satisfaction
about
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 working is created by 3 main elements.
First
 of all, as mentioned above, employees
work
 for the salary which is an essential factor in making a living. The more attractive the income is, the higher possibility
the
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 staff to stick with the company for a long time.
Secondly
,
working
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 environment is
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 factor affecting the employee’s
work
 performance and the suitable environment will support making them always enthusiastic and full of energy when working.
However
, through a process of contributing at
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company
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, staff
also
 desire to improve their skills and expand their knowledge
then
 they can apply them in realistic or to develop their future career.
For example
, they want to participate in internal training courses
such
 as the seminars hosted by leaders or experts
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job satisfaction
  • wellbeing
  • contribute
  • meaningful work
  • work-life balance
  • career progression
  • workplace environment
  • recognition
  • constructive feedback
  • compensation
  • benefits
  • job security
  • autonomy
  • skills match
  • interests match
  • variety
  • challenge
  • economic conditions
  • labor market
  • individual expectations
  • job role
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