Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,many developed
countries
helping to
developing
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countries
with
the
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trade services.
However
,civilians ponder that government should look upon the issues which
is
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faced by their own
country
rather than wasting remuneration on
the
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international aid.I completely agree with the notion reasons for my agreement are explained in the following paragraphs. To embark with,money will have
significant
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impact on any nation’s development.Out of all the
sector
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foremast is,
economy
of the
country
plays a vital role.
Therefore
,if authorities spend lots of amounts of money to help other
countries
,it
wil
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will
badly affects
to
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the
economy
.
For example
,if a
country
has 50% of the trade with
equipments
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so,they give 25% as a help to the poor
country
then
it will have badly affects to the
economy
.
Moreover
,
government
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the government
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is spending money on international aid to improve the rate of unemployment but in their own
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numerous citizens are facing problems regarding
job
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jobs
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and unemployment.
For instance
,in
India
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there are plenty of rural areas which does not have proper systems regarding jobs or employment opportunities.
Similarly
,the
country
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is provide
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help to the other
country
should be perfectly known what they are suffering from
then
after
provide
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services.
Although
rich
countries
always
giving
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their support to the developing
countries
, the developing
countries
will always be dependent on rich
countries
and couldn’t
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themselves by doing hard work.To exemplify,various
countries
are making different kinds of products and exports to other
countries
so,poor
countries
should try to make out small items by using existing materials.Eventually,it will have
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impact
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country
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and
also
boost their
economy
. To conclude,
this
essay has been explored with enough evidence which
finally
allows to pen down and state that providing help is very effective steps taken by the
countries
but give support in a limited way and make sure poor
countries
will improve by themselves
hence
,they can definitely stabilise their
economy
.
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