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Some people feel that boarding schools (where students or pupils live at the school during the term) are an excellent option for children, while other people disagree for a number of reasons. Consider both sides of this debate and reach a conclusion.

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It is believed
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 some boarding schools provide dormitories,
the
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 residential house
having
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gives more opportunities.
Whereas
 others continue to be rather controversial because
this
 is a less convincing statement. It would appear that their arguments on both sides
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 negative and positive. On the one hand, Who believes boarding school has residential houses and dormitories provided to
students
 and pupils it is a good way for them. For instance, some of the
parents
 are very busy, having a job from morning to evening. They don`t have spare time for their kids,
also
 it is widely agreed that youth
students
 need to self-study and they think
this
 is the best way to improve
themself
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their skills and other abilities.
In addition
, staying during the term in school has many advantages
such
 as having friends and participating in many activities, being a part of the social club. It seems likely that youth
students
 will be more open.
On the other hand
, opponents of
parents
 believe that being at
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home has more advantages.
For instance
, teach them
to
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good morals and skills, more careless. There is a widespread belief that away from financial problems,
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bullying, violence, and bad habits. It seems to demonstrate that the
parents
 are more focused on their children.
In addition
, if something happened to the
students
, or hurt themselves a long-term impact is given hard damage
to
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their mentality.
Overall
, it seems advisable that
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 to make
parents
 want to raise safety and
be living
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a
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closer
their
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to their
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 pupils.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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