Some countries today have passed laws against smoking tobacco in public buildings such as offices and restaurants. Other countries have no intention of doing this. Consider the possible arguments on both sides of this debate, and reach your own conclusion on which side you favour.

Most
countries
agree that
the
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legislation against smoking tobacco in public should exist.
However
, it seems that some nations have not set a nationwide smoking
ban
covering all public indoor areas. We will consider both sides of the discussion in the essay. On the one hand, opponents of smoking bans have
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argued that it is against their ‘freedom of choice’, which leads them to travel somewhere else to smoke cigarettes.
Moreover
, some
countries
,
such
as China, agreed that banning only smoking does not seem right as long as there are many potential health hazards
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(drugs, alcohol, etc), which pose similar, or much greater than smoking.
Furthermore
, the hospitality industry tends to be affected by the smoking
ban
the most. Individuals who smoke, are major patrons of retailers and the number of these patrons might diminish when a smoking
ban
is imposed. In that case, the possibility of numerous employees losing their jobs may
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, which could lead to a rise in unemployment.
However
, those who support the smoking
ban
are able to cite evidence from other
countries
(including Australia and Russia) where
against
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smoking in public areas has apparently benefited a
various
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number of health advantages
due to
reduction
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of respiratory problems and heart attacks. The policy is significantly useful to
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non-smokers, who happen to inhale second-hand smoke and
thus
, breathe in a similar substance as smokers.
In addition
, proponents of the smoking
ban
claim that the influence of smokers is extremely reduced in some
countries
.
For example
, after they imposed a smoking
ban
in Australia, more individuals stopped smoking, which
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that fewer people would be influenced by smokers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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