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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#year #languages #people #life #world
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The line graph provides data on the ratio of
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 to the total young population in the UK between 1990 and 2001. The proportions of
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 4 age groups. Overall, the proportion of infants aged 0 to 4
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 decreased during
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 period while the proportion of
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 aged 10 to 14
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 increased. 0-
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 and 15-
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 were both approximately at 26
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 in 1990.Just over 24% of young British people are between 5 and 9
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 old while 23% of them are between 10 and 14
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 old. By 2001, the birth rate decreased and the percentage of newborns was just over 23% while the percentage of 10-
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 increased markedly to more than 26%. To summarize for 10-14
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 Britons dominate the young generation in the UK with a rate that steadily increases in the following
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 the percentage is lowest in the early
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, British
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 aged 5-9 were more than 26% between 1995-1997 but
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 proportion gradually decreased and eventually fell to just over 25% in 2001.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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