As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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the rise in world commerce, many commodities that are utilized on a

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basis are manufactured in different nations and have to be shipped to faraway distances. I believe that

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has more positive implications than negative as will be discussed in

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essay. Admittedly, transporting goods from one country to another does not come without its drawbacks. One minor demerit is that it leads to food spoilage.

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is because the products that are being transported

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a long time to get to the destination country, and as

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the goods get spoilt in the process.

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, my Neighbor’s products that were moved from Lagos State to Abia State, by road, took more than a week, and, in the process, all the produce was wasted.

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, produce

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spoilt when moved to far distance.

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, despite the above minor drawback, I believe the advantage associated with the transportation of commodities to a long-distance far supersedes its

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. One major benefit is that it increases the revenue of the host country.

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, the exporting nation has more income being generated

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of the products they export.

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, the income of China has greatly increased because they export commodities globally. So, countries gain more when they transport goods

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long distances. In conclusion,

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the transportation of produce to distant countries has some demerits, I believe that the benefit in terms of a rise in the income of the exporting nation far surpasses the drawback of food spoilage. Efforts should be made by relevant authorities to make it a norm.

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Ensure you clearly address all parts of the essay question in your response. Make sure to provide a balanced evaluation of both the benefits and drawbacks of the trend.

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Improve the introduction and conclusion of your essay by providing a clear thesis statement in the introduction and a summary of your main points in the conclusion.

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