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Advantages and disadvantages of travelling with a group.

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Travelling is a necessity for some and
leasure
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leisure
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 for others. Some like to go to new places alone, others prefer a company. Some of the advantages of travelling in a group are safety and companionship, while there are a few
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 as well like conflict in opinion and physical
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 there are some
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, it can be said that overall advantages outweigh the
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. On one hand, couple of
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 which are faced in a group trip are issues relating to
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 in thinking among the members,
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 places to visit, food, timings etc.
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, every individual has
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 own level of physical boundaries example sleep timings, walking
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, to name a few. It can be difficult to enjoy on the trip in case of clashes in understanding among members. Whereas,
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, there are many positives to travelling to a new place with a known person. New territories bring unknown risks and security concerns which become less scary if one has a company of a partner.
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, it is always good to have a companion on
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. Having a loving company can transform the trip into a memorable experience. In conclusion, discovering a new location with a team member has its
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fare
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 share of advantages,
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 in likes and body's capabilities.
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