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The most essential component of a person’s life is his or her time at the workplace, and life turns meaningless once no job satisfaction is obtained. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#component #person’s #life #time #workplace #job #satisfaction
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Most
people
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 in the community opine that
life
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 may be wasted if you could not find
job
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 satisfaction since it is the main part of a person's
life
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 .
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 ,
life
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 should not be completely dependent on the
job
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 and if you are not satisfied with your
work
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 always there is a chance to change the
work
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 .
Hence
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this
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 writer is in complete disagreement with the given notion.
To begin
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 with , most
people
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 in generation X think about
job
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 security and climbing the corporate ladder for more opportunities and high salaries.
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 , they should understand that working
life
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 is only part of their
life
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 and they have to respect the other responsibilities of
life
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 as well .
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, some
people
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 forget to care for their own family due to
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-related commitments and
this
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 may lead to conflicts in family
life
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 .
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 , they have to realise that
life
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 is not based on the
job
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 they are doing .
On the other hand
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 , employers in most government and non-government
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fields
, think to keep doing the same
job
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 , even they are not satisfied with the
work
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 . Unfortunately ,
this
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 could lead to a down-lift in the effect and the efficacy of the worker and ultimately it will negatively affect both parties .
However
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 , these employers forget the fact that , if they are not satisfied with their current
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 , these
job
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 fields can be changed at any time.
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 , according to a recent survey conducted by The World Bank has shown, 55% of the young generation who are born in the Millenium have changed their jobs due to an unsatisfactory working environment . In summary,
although
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 some
people
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 are more concerned about
job
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 satisfaction, they should understand that
work
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-related problems can be changed with the change of jobs or working place .
on the other hand
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 , they should not completely commit to the
job
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 since they have to have a private
life
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 as well.
hence
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 ,
this
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 writer is in complete disagreement with the fact that
life
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 turns meaningless when there is no
job
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 satisfaction.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • essential
  • component
  • workplace
  • job satisfaction
  • meaningless
  • extent
  • agree
  • disagree
  • significant
  • crucial
  • purposeless
  • factors
  • contribute
  • balancing
  • personal life
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