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As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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It is true that , Due to the ascending in worldwide trade , most of the items which are in our use in every single day are going popular in demand.Impact of that their prices are significantly increasing ,
Still
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 I believe
this
 is not good for the economy of any
country
. To commence with the view , Many developing
countries
 importing big amount of goods from their neighbouring
countries
 . To elaborate it , Due to a large amount of import,
This
 step is affecting the
country
 economy . While
instead
 of earning the money
country
 is spending their money to purchase the goods . So
this
 is a very big disadvantage for the
country
's growth .
For instance
 , According to the survey which was conducted in 2009 by CNN news that reveals the report , Asian
countries
 are importing 50% of goods from other regions.
Firstly
 , The product is going to be expensive because it has to be transported long distances.
Thus
 there is no other way , in
fact
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 we make our own.
Further
 strengthening the views , It could make a benefit for underdeveloping by using their own products. While using branded products we trying to purchase our local brand and boost our economy stronger. To cite an example , In the early 1990 Pakistani government start an awareness campaign. The campaign is that ''Be Pakistani and Buy Pakistani" , and
this
 is a great step to encourages people were buying their
country
 made items In the end , we should buy our
countries
instead
 of boosting other
country
's growth we should boost our growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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