Some people believe that is is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

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There are those who hold the view that it is better to endure bad circumstances, like being unhappy with your work or having a financial crisis. Some think that it is much better to indulge in the problem and deal with it to improve

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situations. Others agree that if you have a problem going on in your life, it is much better to accept it because they think that life is like a ball, it is round, sometimes you are at your worst, which is the lower part and other times at your best, the upper part of it. Even though they are not satisfied in their job due to the fact that it is very toxic when it comes to their surroundings or a very low salary grade without even a work-life balance environment.

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, they have no other choice but to keep on going for the sake of their family in that way they can still provide for their needs.

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, some think that it is much better to sort out your problems and not leave

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behind. They believe that every obstacle that we are facing is just a lesson to another complication that we will encounter in the future. It will help us to grow, go out of our comfort zone and be mature to handle every difficulty that we will experience. The Lord will never give us a

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that we cannot overcome and

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there is always a rainbow after the rain. In conclusion, I highly agree that we have to deal with our problems rather than

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accept the situation that we are in. Being able to trust the process and learn from it because

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every situation, God is always with us along the way.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Some people believe that is is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations.

Fully explain your ideas

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Financial education should be included as a mandatory subject in schools to prepare students for managing money effectively.

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones nowadays has unwanted effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, some celebrities such as film stars, sportsmen and pop musicians are paid too much money. Do you agree or disagree? Which jobs should be highly paid?