The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of frozen fish pies. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
diagram shows that there are a number of processes involved in the commercial production of frozen fish
pies. The main ingredients consist of fresh salmon, peas and sauce, with sliced potatoes, and they are prepared separately. The potatoes, which may have been delivered up to a month in advance, are cleaned, peeled and cut into slices. The slices are boiled and then
chilled before being stored until needed. The preparation of the fish
is more labour intensive
than the preparation of the potatoes. Within twelve hours of being delivered to the factory, the fresh Add a hyphen
labour-intensive
fish
is cooked by being steamed with lemon juice and salt. Then
the skin and bones are removed by hand and disposed of,
before a visual inspection takes place.
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After
this
, the pies are assembled in microwaveable containers Peas and sauce, which have also
been prepared, are added to the fish
and then
the pie is covered with a layer of cooked potato slices. The pies are then
wrapped and frozen. At this
point
they are ready for dispatch, or they may be stored at the factory before being dispatched.Add a comma
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