We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

These days people are being more dependent on computer-based technologies for all needs, essential or
otherwise
.
This
increasing dependency even for
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has
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impact on the
future
.
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cons will be discussed about
this
reliance. No one can accurately predict what
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holds for us but certain trends can be expected by measuring the present and extrapolating them linearly. Our reliance
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computer
technology
is one
such
that can be examined to predict possible outcomes in the
future
. As we can ascertain, there is exponential growth in all
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products and their adoption is exploding day by day. We are connecting remote villages that once did not even have electricity,
this
trend will continue into the
future
and result in a world completely reliant on
technology
. While many disagree with the fact that
technology
is a boon to society, I
on the other hand
agree with it. Being reliant on computers is not as bad as
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being portrayed,
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is
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there are more pros than cons. To exemplify, communication between places including countries have been possible. Now, even the most remote people are able to connect with the world,
this
would not have been possible without the reliance on
technology
.
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of
businesses
and
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of new vectors within
businesses
can
also
be taken as examples. Dependency on
technology
has
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to
growth
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the growth
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of
businesses
and created millions of
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jobs that once were non-existent. In conclusion, It is okay to be reliant on
computer
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and
its
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technology
. There are more benefits than drawbacks. In the coming
future
, every person in
this
world will use and be reliant on some
technology
related to computers. It is in fact a good thing for us and the society as
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apparatus between people and nations will dramatically improve and new jobs will be created in
businesses
that are formed due to new
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Artificial Intelligence (AI)
  • Machine Learning
  • Automated
  • Internet of Things (IoT)
  • Telecommuting
  • Digital Technology
  • Virtual Workplaces
  • Computer-assisted
  • Healthcare Industry
  • Reliance
  • Privacy
  • Human Interaction
  • Job Displacement
  • Automation
  • Digital Divide
  • Cybersecurity
  • Internet Safety
  • Digital Crime
  • Ethical Considerations
  • Environmental Impacts
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  • Carbon Footprint
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