We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology. How do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?

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These days people are being more dependent on computer-based technologies for all needs, essential or

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increasing dependency even for

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reliance. No one can accurately predict what

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holds for us but certain trends can be expected by measuring the present and extrapolating them linearly. Our reliance

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computer

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that can be examined to predict possible outcomes in the

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. As we can ascertain, there is exponential growth in all

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products and their adoption is exploding day by day. We are connecting remote villages that once did not even have electricity,

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trend will continue into the

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and result in a world completely reliant on

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. While many disagree with the fact that

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is a boon to society, I

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agree with it. Being reliant on computers is not as bad as

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being portrayed,

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there are more pros than cons. To exemplify, communication between places including countries have been possible. Now, even the most remote people are able to connect with the world,

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would not have been possible without the reliance on

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businesses

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of new vectors within

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be taken as examples. Dependency on

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and created millions of

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jobs that once were non-existent. In conclusion, It is okay to be reliant on

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. There are more benefits than drawbacks. In the coming

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, every person in

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world will use and be reliant on some

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related to computers. It is in fact a good thing for us and the society as

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apparatus between people and nations will dramatically improve and new jobs will be created in

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that are formed due to new

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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Topic Vocabulary:

Artificial Intelligence (AI)
Machine Learning
Automated
Internet of Things (IoT)
Telecommuting
Digital Technology
Virtual Workplaces
Computer-assisted
Healthcare Industry
Reliance
Privacy
Human Interaction
Job Displacement
Automation
Digital Divide
Cybersecurity
Internet Safety
Digital Crime
Ethical Considerations
Environmental Impacts
E-waste
Carbon Footprint

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