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Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion about this?

#people #companies #employees #exercise #time
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Nowadays, the level of
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health
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 of
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the public
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 is declining at an alarming rate. Some concerned
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 claim that employers, being responsible for their workers' wellbeing have to allow them to spend from 1 to 2 hours exercising.
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 it may lead to some economical problems for
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, I wholeheartedly believe that extra
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 for physical activity benefits not only employees' mental and physical wellbeing but
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 themselves.
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 of all,
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time
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 allowed to exercise will benefit those who are having a constant heavy workload.
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, being driven by a desire to earn more,
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 take more and more projects and overlook their
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 in favour of work, which
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 results in the appearance of various illnesses and more пропускм.
Companies
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 are worried about the
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 of employees with extra
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 to at least avoid
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 dire consequences through physical
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activeness
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,
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 implement
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 approach benefit as well. Exercises, even moderate ones, stimulate brain activity, increasing efficiency at the workplace. Obviously, the higher productivity and dedication of employees, the higher the revenue of a company that hired them.
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, it would be
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 forward-looking policy for
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 to allocate a couple of hours on the improvement of
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,
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however
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 expenditures required.
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, some not interested occupants may take
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advantage by wasting the
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 given on online games or television, and if the number of
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 with
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 careless attitude increases, it would mean that all the resources spent on
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 of
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 system will be gone in vain. In conclusion, I suppose that company owners should express
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concern about the
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 of
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 working on them, as the chance to make a company flourish is hidden in
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 to some extent.
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