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Some people think that companies should provide employees with exercise time during the day. What is your opinion about this?

#people #companies #employees #exercise #time
Nowadays, the level of
general
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health
 of
public
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 is declining at an alarming rate. Some concerned
people
 claim that employers, being responsible for their workers' wellbeing have to allow them to spend from 1 to 2 hours exercising.
Although
 it may lead to some economical problems for
companies
, I wholeheartedly believe that extra
time
 for physical activity benefits not only employees' mental and physical wellbeing but
companies
 themselves.
First
 of all,
extra
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time
 allowed to exercise will benefit those who are having a constant heavy workload.
In other words
, being driven by a desire to earn more,
people
 take more and more projects and overlook their
health
 in favour of work, which
then
 results in the appearance of various illnesses and more пропускм.
Companies
which
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 are worried about the
health
 of employees with extra
time
 to at least avoid
such
 dire consequences through physical
activness
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activeness
.
In addition
,
companies
which
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 implement
this
 approach benefit as well. Exercises, even moderate ones, stimulate brain activity, increasing efficiency at the workplace. Obviously, the higher productivity and dedication of employees, the higher the revenue of a company that hired them.
Therefore
, it would be
more
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 forward-looking policy for
companies
 to allocate a couple of hours on the improvement of
health
,
however
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 expenditures required.
Nevertheless
, some not interested occupants may take
an
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advantage by wasting the
time
 given on online games or television, and if the number of
people
 with
such
 careless attitude increases, it would mean that all the resources spent on
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 of
this
 system will be gone in vain. In conclusion, I suppose that company owners should express
a
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concern about the
health
 of
people
 working on them, as the chance to make a company flourish is hidden in
health
 to some extent.
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