some people think all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Many people feel that university members ought to gain knowledge the way they want,
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others tend to think that student's curriculum should include only beneficial
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(like science and technology), which support them in the future.
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essay discusses both sides of
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argument and
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I will give my own perspective. There are merits of
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education
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of education
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process in universities. If
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young
people
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tought
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taught
tough
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they want it could save
their
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time for their other activities
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as
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, social life and reading books.
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this
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, students
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likely to
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their desire to continue
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knowledge in the particular university. To illustrate, some recent TV
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demonstrated
benefits
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the benefits
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that can bring from
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an open
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curriculum in universities. It is concerned that
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the freedom
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studying
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of studying
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process can help to avoid problems related
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low marks in
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particular
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.
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, there are
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advantages to
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studying
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traditional
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such
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as science and technology. First of all, students who get knowledge about these
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can easily find
apropriate
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appropriate
job
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jobs
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for their bright future. By teaching science and technology they might become a very competitive employee and bring well-paid
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jobs
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. It is
clearly
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that these
kind
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of
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are
main
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the main
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part of important professions like
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engineering
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,
scientists
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science
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,
creator
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creation
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and so on. In conclusion, I believe both sides of the notion have their merits. On balance,
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, it
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that
traditional
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education process in the university should consist
all
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the necessery
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necessery
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necessary
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, which aid them
to build
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good
career
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careers
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.
This
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is because students may not know what they want clearly and choose their
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incorrectly.
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task response
Ensure that each paragraph clearly addresses the prompt and supports the essay's overall argument. Use topic sentences to introduce main points and supporting details to effectively back up your claims.
coherence cohesion
Work on structuring your essay with clear introduction, body, and conclusion. Use linking words and transition phrases to create coherence between paragraphs and effectively guide the reader through your ideas.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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