In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals, and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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suggested

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by dieticians that we should consume less fast

food

in our daily life and I am totally on their side.

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opinion is that we should spend more

time

on traditional cuisine

instead

of fast

food

. One possible problem is that eating too much fast

food

brings

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impact on one's health, especially those who are not fans of

exercises

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and take fast

food

frequently. According to

scienfic

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scientific

statistics, there

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much more heat in

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fast

food

such

as fry chips, baken chicken and so on, than fruits and vegetables, so it is easy to lead to an obesity problem for one who

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fast

food

too often. As we all

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, heart attack, high blood pressure and many

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other chronic diseases can be caused by obesity.

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to that, taking fast

food

outside will definitely make a reduction of people's family reunion

time

with family members. Cooking

food

and sharing with families at home was extremely relaxing and pleasurable, it will

also

contribute to a better relationship with them. While eating fast

food

in the restaurant is difficult to achieve the same effect, people usually finish their dinner

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a fast pace speed and goes out of the restaurant.

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, we can see some benefits of fast

food

at the same

time

when we don't have

adequent

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adequate

time

to enjoy a meal and need to go back to the workplace as quick as possible, the

time

-saving fast

food

can fill out stomach in

time

. In conclusion, the disadvantages of having fast

food

surpass its benefits, especially for personal health and family relationship, though it is

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option for us when people don't have

time

to cook themselves.

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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by fast food. This has a negative impact on families, individuals, and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many famous sports players advertise sports products. Do the advantages of their outweighs the disadvantages?

Some people think that exercise is the key to health, while others feel that having a balanced diet is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the money should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree?

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The best way to reduce traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for younger drivers and to lower the age limit for elderly ones. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.