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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of the most people's lives. Other think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility.

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Many
individual
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 believe that the adolescent periods are the
thickled
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tickled
 pink times of
the
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most
people
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's lives. Other humans claim that
fully
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a fully
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 grown
person
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 life takes more gladness, despite
of
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big duty.
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 with, some
people
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 think that adult life brings more happiness, regardless of huge responsibility. There are a lot of opportunities if
people
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 become
adult
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,
for instance
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, being independent,
travel
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 around the world and
also
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 have own car or wealth. Many
people
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 wait
this
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period
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 of
time
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 due to it is enjoyable and the best
time
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 they work
own
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 job, they can provide themselves and
also
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 they find significant other.
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, they have
greater
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a greater
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 duty,
it
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 has difficulties for them.
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, most
people
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 prefer to live
this
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time
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 because they enjoy amazing
moments
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 and unforgettable
moments
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. On the other side,
the
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most
people
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 believe that
teenage
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the teenage
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 years are the best times of
the
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most
people
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's lives. In
this
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period
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 there are many happiest
moments
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,
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, playing football and other activities,
speak
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speaking
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 as like children, loving someone and
also
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stressful
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.
The most
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adolescent
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adolescents
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 feel strange and depressed because they think that I have a lot of problems and
i
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I
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fed
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am fed
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 up
to
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with
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 everything. They have difficulties from study and loving topics. They
tent
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tend
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 to die themselves, it is very funny to older
people
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.
The most
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people
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 long to live in
this
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period
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 because it is so memorable and exciting. To sum up, I totally
agree
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this
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 point which is teenage years due to
have
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having
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 many unforgettable
moments
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 and feelings. At
this
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 moment I am
adolescent
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an adolescent
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 and
i
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I
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 enjoy
this
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period
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 of
time
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.
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