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In today's job market it is far more important to have practical skills than theoretical knowledge. In the future, job applicants may not need any formal qualification. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#job #market #skills #future #applicants #qualification
In today’s
world
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people
 believe in whether or not
people
 don’t need any qualifications or
degree
 but only need practical
experience
 in the workforce. Now we will see in
this
 writing
on
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the facts of a young adult who has a
degree
 but no
real
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life
experience
 or a person who has no
degree
 but plenty of
real
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life
experience
. In today’s
world
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 most businesses believe that
people
 who have no qualifications or degrees but have
experience
 of working in the real world are more than enough to qualify for a job at any business. The reason why most businesses think
this
 way is because they believe that when you are getting degrees from universities doesn't show young adults what it's really like to work without someone helping you or giving you an easy path to success. From the young
adults
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 point of
view
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 they see that getting the best
degree
 possible is the best way to become successful, other
people
 believe that degrees aren’t important but only on how they react in
real
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life
 situations.
For example
 when students get top of their class for becoming a doctor but can’t figure out a solution to do the procedure but the other student who’s had
real
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life
experience
 manages to do the procedure
than
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 the person without the
degree
 would get the job. To sum up I would like to say that if students and young adults have more work
experience
 and a small
amount
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 of qualifications I believe that those
people
 deserve the chance of getting the best job possible because they know how to deal with pressure in
real
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life
 experiences.
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