When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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When deciding on an employment
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remuneration is the most fundamental consideration.In my
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i
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agree payment is crucial as it
fulfil
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basic needs as
money
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is needed for meals,housing,treatment and schooling despite personal relationship ,
environment
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the environment
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of our
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surroundings
in our workplace and calling as a career
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override
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by payment.
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current
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economy is on the rise
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society is spending
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a lot
of
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for just basic needs. We all need
money
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for food,housing,healthcare and education.
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government
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not taken a step in adjusting the wages despite
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rise in commodities leading to
people
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preoritizing
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prioritizing
prioritising
on take-home pay.
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research done by the Nairobi university
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that 80%
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would like to work overseas because there
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better payments to meet their needs.
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,it is prudent to consider earnings prior
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out a
job
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opportunity
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,personal relationship and environment
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unavoiable
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unavoidable
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having a
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on earning as the main reason for a
job
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offer
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.For outstanding
productivity
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people
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must enjoy the work and have a good
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system from
colleaques
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colleagues
and management.
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job
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satisfaction
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along with experience and skills learned
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achievments
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achievements
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will be well established.
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,2021 research shows that take-home payment is not the only
requirment
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requirement
to take a
job
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offer
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,some
people
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choose a jobs
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offer
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as a calling to help others.
Inconlusion
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,salary affect
people
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in choosing a post because of rising demands and instability of an economy.
Money
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outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
other benefits attached to the
offer
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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