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The illustrations show two stages in the development of the mobile phone. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You should write at least 150 words.

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The pictures depict two stages in the innovation of the cellphone. They are traditional cellphone and contemporary
cellphone
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cellphones
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. Overall, the modern mobile
phone
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 is lighter, equipped with
full-colour
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a full-colour
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 display and has many features and functions as compared to the traditional
phone
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. In detail, an early mobile
phone
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 has a 130
mm
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 height and 50
mm
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 width . It has a black and white display, with a keyboard showing numbers and numeric symbols.
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, it has an earphone and a functional select button and weighs 150 g. While a contemporary mobile
phone
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 features a flip cover with the earphone attached,
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 it is a full-colour display and built-in with a camera and video capability to capture pictures and record. It is lighter than a traditional cell
phone
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 with a 90mm height and 40mm width.
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, it has an extra function to browse an e-mail, internet, music player, music player game and facility to clean and check software updates. According to the picture, it
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 shows that a contemporary mobile
phone
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 is lighter than a traditional cell
phone
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 with a weight of 70
g as
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 compared to 150g.
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, they are both built-in with earphones.
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