Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money.Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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In society, many
people
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often meet bad
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throughout their
lives
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. Some
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suggest that it is superior to accept
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terrible circumstances
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as
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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job or
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of money whilst other opponents believe that seeking a chance to enhance the
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have different notions about
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issue but I personally prefer the
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views. On one side of the agreement, many
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think that there are inexplicable facts not to accept the bad
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. The main reason for
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is that it is a natural occurrence which means that
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people’s
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lives
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have partly good and partly distressing circumstances as it is not in
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people’s
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own hands.
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makes some
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finer to claim
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bad
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such
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as unsatisfactory job.
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, lacking
finances
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conditions
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mostly happen
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most
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people’s
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lives
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is because of the cost-of-living place where
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live
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and the accessories that they buy
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every day.
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this
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, some poor families encounter with
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shortage
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a shortage
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of money and cannot afford for their children to send the schools so
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it is impossible for them not to accept
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situations
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, despite these aforementioned views, I firmly hold the opinion that it is finer to improve awful
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in a better way.
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,
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should put a lot of effort
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into
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disappointing
jobs
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by changing the current
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into
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such
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as talking funny to colleagues and thinking of
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jobs
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in a better way, like boosting their
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.
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can lead to
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being more satisfied with their
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.
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, some
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should reduce buying unnecessary things every day to prevent lowing on funds.
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,
instead
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of claiming
shortage
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of money as a terrible circumstance in poor
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people’s
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lives
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, they should improve their
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by working
jobs
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.
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to
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, children in
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the poor
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family
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families
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should study hard to get scholarships which provide a better situation
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as not costing any funds for them in schools
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their family cannot afford to send them to schools. Taking everything into account, I believe that improving these bad
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such
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as unsatisfactory
jobs
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and
shortage
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of finances in a better way can impact improvements in
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people’s
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lives
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nevertheless
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there are some
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who consider
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it better
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to claim
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terrible circumstances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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