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It is the responsibility of schools to teach children good behavior in addition to provide formal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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No one doubts that school learning plays a significant role in people’s
life
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. People who receive better education and behave themselves properly in society are highly appreciated and recognized. Some people argue that schools should be responsible not only for the decent
behaviors
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 of children but
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 for providing academic study. In the following
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 I will discuss
this
 statement from my perspective. There is some truth in the above statement. Academic organizations are places where kids are taught useful and valuable knowledge, in the meantime, how to behave properly is
also
 one important part of their duties.
However
, their main task is to give formal schooling and develop children’s academic capability, because they have the most decent amount of resources to achieve
this
 goal.
For instance
, professionally trained teachers and libraries with
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copies
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 of academic reference books enable them to become ideal providers of various knowledge. If they spend too much time
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teaching students how to behave in their everyday lives, it will be impossible for
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 to fulfil the educational function as a whole, to make it worse, their valuable resources will be wasted. Family plays a significant role in people’s lives.
That is
 the very first step in the cultivation of a person’s moral
standard
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 and social
behavior
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. Parents are the first teachers of their offspring.The reason is quite obvious that kids spend at least five to six years at home with their parents or caregivers before they go for formal learning in schools.
Therefore
, parents shall set good examples and teach some social rules and moral criteria in order to get their boys and girls ready for the studying environment. In conclusion, schools
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 put more emphasis on imparting academic knowledge
instead
 of teaching kids how to behave properly
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their
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 growing into adults.
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the prompt. Consider discussing the role of schools in teaching good behavior as well as formal education.
coherence cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. Ensure that your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points and make your arguments more compelling.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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