Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries and shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
In modern civilization, the
phone
has become an essential role in the daily life of humans but sometimes it can be disturbance
while working and intrusive in public places. So some Replace the word
disturbed
people
think that phones
should not be allowed to use in libraries, shops and on public transports
. It is true to some extent point Fix the agreement mistake
transport
however
rather than totally banning using phones
, some restrictions should be applied to using phones
in public.
Firstly
, phone
ring tones and sounds coming from phones
can disturb to
other Change preposition
apply
people
in some public places like libraries and art exhibitions while they are really concentrating on something they enjoyed. Also
, it can be same in public transports
like Fix the agreement mistake
transport
bus
or train while other Fix the agreement mistake
buses
people
are focusing or finishing on their works before attending to jobs. Moreover
, students can be distracted by phones
from their studies when they were learning in school. Lastly
, phone
wavelengths and frequencies can interfere delicate
medical instruments and Change preposition
with delicate
equipments
like pacemakers, cardiac monitors and defibrillators in hospitals.
Change the wording
equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
On the other hand
, phone
can Add an article
the phone
also
be useful even in places like libraries because it can be turned into silent
mode not to disturb other Add an article
a silent
people
and can google in a short period of time instead
of finding every details
in Change to a singular noun
detail
library
. Add an article
the library
a library
Phones
are also
multifunctional so it
can be used as Correct pronoun usage
they
an
entertainment to get rid of boredom while waiting on buses or trains and Remove the article
apply
it
can Correct pronoun usage
they
also
be used as a recording device to get evidence in case some instance accidents happen in public. Parents can also
call and track their children from phones
to make sure they are safe and where they are.
In conclusion, although
it is true that it can be intrusive sometimes, it has a lot of useful features that are needed in our daily life so we should use it with care and try not to disturb others.Submitted by Nobel
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