Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries and shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In modern civilization, the

phone

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has become an essential role in the daily life of humans but sometimes it can be

disturbance

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while working and intrusive in public places. So some

people

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think that

phones

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should not be allowed to use in libraries, shops and on public

transports

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. It is true to some extent point

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rather than totally banning using

phones

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, some restrictions should be applied to using

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in public.

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phone

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ring tones and sounds coming from

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can disturb

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other

people

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in some public places like libraries and art exhibitions while they are really concentrating on something they enjoyed.

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, it can be same in public

transports

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transport

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bus

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buses

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or train while other

people

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are focusing or finishing on their works before attending to jobs.

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, students can be distracted by

phones

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from their studies when they were learning in school.

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phone

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wavelengths and frequencies can interfere

delicate

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medical instruments and

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equipment

types of equipment

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like pacemakers, cardiac monitors and defibrillators in hospitals.

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phone

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the phone

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can

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be useful even in places like libraries because it can be turned into

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a silent

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mode not to disturb other

people

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and can google in a short period of time

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of finding every

details

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library

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the library

a library

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Phones

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are

also

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multifunctional so

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they

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can be used as

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entertainment to get rid of boredom while waiting on buses or trains and

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can

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be used as a recording device to get evidence in case some instance accidents happen in public. Parents can

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call and track their children from

phones

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to make sure they are safe and where they are. In conclusion,

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it is true that it can be intrusive sometimes, it has a lot of useful features that are needed in our daily life so we should use it with care and try not to disturb others.

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Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries and shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Your opinion

Some experts, believe that it is better for children to begin learning, a foreign language at primary school, rather than secondary school, do the advantages of the outweighes the disadvantages.

Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

More and more fathers are taking break from their careers so that they can stay home and take care of their children while their wives work. This is better for the family than having both parents work full time. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.