Some people think that the use of mobiles (cell) phones should be banned in public places such as in libraries and shop and on public transport. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In modern civilization, the
phone
has become an essential role in the daily life of humans but sometimes it can be
disturbance
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while working and intrusive in public places. So some
people
think that
phones
should not be allowed to use in libraries, shops and on public
transports
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. It is true to some extent point
however
rather than totally banning using
phones
, some restrictions should be applied to using
phones
in public.
Firstly
,
phone
ring tones and sounds coming from
phones
can disturb
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other
people
in some public places like libraries and art exhibitions while they are really concentrating on something they enjoyed.
Also
, it can be same in public
transports
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like
bus
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or train while other
people
are focusing or finishing on their works before attending to jobs.
Moreover
, students can be distracted by
phones
from their studies when they were learning in school.
Lastly
,
phone
wavelengths and frequencies can interfere
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medical instruments and
equipments
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equipment
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like pacemakers, cardiac monitors and defibrillators in hospitals.
On the other hand
,
phone
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the phone
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can
also
be useful even in places like libraries because it can be turned into
silent
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mode not to disturb other
people
and can google in a short period of time
instead
of finding every
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in
library
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the library
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.
Phones
are
also
multifunctional so
it
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can be used as
an
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entertainment to get rid of boredom while waiting on buses or trains and
it
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can
also
be used as a recording device to get evidence in case some instance accidents happen in public. Parents can
also
call and track their children from
phones
to make sure they are safe and where they are. In conclusion,
although
it is true that it can be intrusive sometimes, it has a lot of useful features that are needed in our daily life so we should use it with care and try not to disturb others.
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