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Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employees who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree ?

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It's undeniable that globalization is the trend of today's world . There are some people who think developed
countries
 should allow recruitment offers for the skilled workforce from underdeveloped
countries
 , l completely agree with
this
 notion . In the following essay , some of the ideas that support my opinion will be explored thoroughly. One idea is ,
allowance
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 of job offers for
foreign
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the foreign
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 workforce is economically profitable for the host country .
This
 is because , those employees are as professional as the
indiginous
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indigenous
 people ;
however
 , they haven't been given the proper opportunity to prove themselves .
Consequently
 , if those workers are given the chance by famous companies , they will do their utmost efforts to prove that they are trustworthy .
For example
 , Amazon , which is a household name company , dedicate 43
percent
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 of
it's
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its
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 job positions
for
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to
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 professional foreign employees , a strategy that keeps
competitive
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a competitive
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enviroment
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environment
 in the work area in
ordrr
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order
 to increase
the
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apply
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profits . Another idea is , job offers for
skillful
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skilful
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 workers abroad is advantageous for their home
countries
. Whereas those workers provide the host
countries
 with their unique skills , they return home with money and experience that help
develope
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develop
 their own
countries
 .
For instance
 ,
South
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in South
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 Africa when suffered from poverty and negligence , African doctors and engineers who
traveled
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travelled
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 and proved themselves in developed
countries
 with recent advances , returned back home and helped their own
countries
 to prosper . In conclusion ,
Although
 some people might think that it is
waste
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a waste
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 of indigenous
labour power
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labour-power
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 to travel and work abroad , it
appear
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 to be highly profitable for both the host developed country and the underdeveloped country that will make benefit later from their experienced citizens .
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