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Friends can you please check my essay. Topic is - Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world today
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 faces a threat to its existence due to environmental problems of grave nature. The rise of
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 issues might be attributed to the rapid industrialisation led by technological advancements in the
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 century.
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, I strongly believe that these threats will be neutralised too, by technology itself. Inventions in the areas of
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, transportation and industrial waste management will lead to an improved climatic condition.
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, the most serious concern is
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global warming. Many factors like air pollution, water pollution have contributed to it. We have
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 been long dependent on traditional
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fossil
 fuels for meeting our
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 requirements.
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, with the advancement of science, we have now
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renewable sources.
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, using solar and wind
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 to that, the use of electric vehicles is on the rise across the globe and that
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in fact
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 will lower
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air pollution levels.
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,
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governments around the world are pushing for
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research and development in the area of clean
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 which is a welcome step for
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mankind.
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 been
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 of inventions in the area of industrial waste management. The companies are now mandated by the local bodies to use the latest equipment for
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 their waste.
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, the field of transportation has
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 seen the rise of the newest
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technology
 being experimented
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 various countries.
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, the development of hyper-loop in Japan and bullet train in India. Nowadays, many companies are developing machines which will make the atmosphere cleaner in future. In a nutshell, an intelligent scientific community along with the push from
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governments around the globe
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 will lead to many
intresting
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interesting
 innovations, which will ultimately solve the environmental issues. The changes are visible now
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 and will become more evident in the upcoming years.
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