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some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Although
 it is thought by some that
people
 should adopt to the
culture
 of the
country
 they are visiting, others dispute and consider that countries must be hospitable and
welcomr
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welcome
welcomes
 various cultures. I am convinced that tourists ought to reach the balance between their own beliefs and local
culture
 in order not to be considered an impolite
person
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people
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. On the one hand,
to begin
with
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 it is a sign of respect to follow the traditions and customs of a
country
.
However
, a part of going abroad is to experience
first
-hand how other
people
 live. Another advantageous point here is that both sides
gets
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 to see the cultural difference.
Nevertheless
, by not
adopting
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adapting
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to
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the
culture
, it is possible to deeply offend or insult a local person which could lead to an
unpleasent
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unpleasant
 situation.
For instance
, chewing gum is not something acceptable in Singapore.
Furthermore
, by
adoptinh
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adapting
adopting
 to a
culture
people
 can be more easily accepted by locals which can enhance a person's travel experience.
On the other hand
, it is not always easy to find access to all information about a
country
's cultural practices.
Moreover
,
accordingly
, tourists can influence and even alter local
culture
 and
people
's
culture
 forms part of their identity;
hence
, they should not have to change it.
Thus
,
people
 should not have to
adopt
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adapt
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to
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any customs that might conflict with religion. In conclusion, I reckon it is unrealistic to expect that all foreigners entering a
country
 will discard their own
culture
 in favour of new and unfamiliar customs.
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