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You work at home and have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment. In your letter -describe the problem.

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The supplied graph gives information about the proportion of people who attend the cinemas in one determinated European country during the weekly days of 2003, 2005 and 2007. Overall, it's possible to observe that citizens prefer going to the movies on weekends than in the middle of the week, except on Friday.
In addition
, there wasn't a huge difference between the number of users in comparison among the given years. In the
first
 four days of the week, there were a slight amount of people who attended the cinema. In 2003, Monday and Thursday detained the minor number of users, which were about 10 and 12 spectators, while Tuesday and Wednesday modestly showed an increase at 20 and 15, respectively. In
this
 same way, in 2005 followed a similar tendency, with a pick on Tuesday. Meanwhile, in 2007,
this
 weekday and Thursday had the highest levels around 18 and 14 spectators.
On the other hand
, the trend of attendance between Friday and Sunday was completely different, demonstrating the hugest quantity of attendants. On Friday, in all of 3 years supply, we can observe the same percentage of people, at 30% each other.
Likewise
, the percentage in 2003 reached the same number of 30% on Sundays.
However
, there was a slight growth in the
next
 two years and another discreet decline in 2007.
Nevertheless
, on Saturday of 2005 the movie's users rapidly increased from 40% to 45%, followed by a modest decrease in 2007.
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