The Government Should Ban Smoking In All Public Places, Even Though This Would Restrict Some People’s Freedoms.

Everyone has the freedom to make their own decision to
smoke
or not to
smoke
.
However
, most people who do
smoke
know that it is harmful to their health but due to
but due to
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the craving / the addiction they continue the use.
Smoking
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ban
in public places severely restricts a person’s opportunities to
smoke
. They will start controlling the urge to
smoke
till they find a place. In the long run, they will be able to control their craving and may reduce their tobacco use. Even though
initially
most
smokers
will feel that their freedom is restricted, some may understand the benefit to themselves after a while. The other part of
this
issue is the hazards of
second hand
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smoking. If smoking continues unabated in public places, the general public will suffer from similar health complications. Studies have shown that passive
smokers
will
also
develop respiratory problems, lung cancer and other diseases.
This
has already become a public health issue
which
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can
also
affect the unborn baby of a pregnant lady. It is high time we found a solution. To conclude, there are compelling reasons for the government to
ban
smoking in all public places. If
such
a
ban
is implemented with measures to educate the public about it
then
the
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smokers
too will understand the importance of
such
ban
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.
Furthermore
, if the
smokers
were
also
educated about the treatment available to help them to quit smoking, some may even stop smoking completely.
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