In some countries, governments are encouraging industries and businesses to move to regional areas outside the big cities. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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In many places in the world, industries and businesses are now suggested to relocate in suburb areas.

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there are some drawbacks regarding

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human resources, I believe that the advantages are much more significant. On the one hand, locating industries and business offices in remote areas

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many obstacles for both these companies and workers.

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of all, companies are facing the problem of recruitment. It is

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a challenging thing to recruit talents as they are seemed to settle down downtown.

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, there is

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a dramatic issue for the workers if their companies move to the outskirts. Travelling a long journey to their workplaces makes them less energy

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focus on their work and

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, they are unable to create high productivity.

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, moving industrial and business activities out of the

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gains tremendous profits. From executives' perspective, the rental expense is dramatically reasonable. More specifically, the rental cost in the outskirt is much cheaper than

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in the

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centre which interests many shops and building instructions.

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, they can shorten the budget and can hire that place or building for the long run. From

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dwellers'perspective, they find it more comfortable to commute around the

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due to the decrease of the number of people using their own vehicles

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as motorbikes, cars to commute to their offices.

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, local citizens can speed their journey up and get rid of traffic jams. In conclusion, I believe that the benefits of relocating workplaces in remote areas prevail over the drawbacks in a long term.

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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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You work in an international company. You need to take some time off work. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter:  explain why you need this time off  give details of when you want this time off  say who can do your work when you are away

Many countries have compulsory military service for young men after they leave school. It would be a good idea for all countries to adopt this system for men, and possibly for women too. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?