The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given two diagrams illustrate the percentage of computer owners in the total population between 2002 and 2010

furthermore

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, detailed by the level of education for the years 2002 and 2010

Overall

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, it is observed that there is a constant and substantial rise in owners of computers over the years

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with

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which

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apply

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2010

had

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having

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the highest proportion.

however

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, the least percentage was by no high school graduate.

Firstly

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, the

owners

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number of owners

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of computers in 2002 was little more than 50% of the population

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, a steady increase was seen in 2004 and 2006 with little below 60% and slightly above 60% respectively.

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marginal increase in 2008 resulted

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70%

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, a little below 80% was seen in the year 2010

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, ownership of computers among no high school grad was 50% higher accounting for 40% in 2010

whereas

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, 15% was in 2002.

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, high school graduates and unfinished graduates had 30% differences

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between 60

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% and 80% respectively in 2010 and 30% and 50% respectively in 2002.

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this

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bachelors

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bachelor's

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degree and postgraduate and graduate had the highest share of

percentage

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percentages

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80 and 90 in 2010

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, 60% and 80% in 2002.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore, whereas".

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

193 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

consistent increase
growing reliance on technology
clear correlation
digital divide
notable growth
most pronounced disparity
gap reduced considerably
percentage growth
higher educational levels
educational groups

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