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Celebrities such as actors, athletes and musicians earn large salaries compared to other professionals. Some people consider this unfair, while others think that celebrities deserve to be paid a lot for the work they do. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion on the subject.

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‏In
this
 contemporary era, the number of
celebrities
 who gain huge wayes has been ascending drastically,
by contrast
, other professionals.
While
the
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 multitude of folks believe it is beneficial, another group, including me, denounce it. Both attitudes are elaborated on in my essay. ‏On the one hand,
celebrities
 could have a positive influence on the public
especially
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 youth, As they are role models.
For instance
, they can support charities or have done a lot of volunteer work.
However
, they exert
undesirable
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 influence in society and they often set a bad example to the youth through they are using drugs, smoking cigarettes and even divorce.it improves unethical behaviour and culture in society. they rarely use their wealth and power to exert good influence. ‏
On the other hand
, there are a lot of critical occupations in the world, As far as I know,
celebrities
offer
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 completely unnecessary and we could all live happily without professional Soccer
for example
. It is unfair that those who provide essential Services
such
 as surgeons, who save people's lives are poor-paid
by comparison
. Everything became clear when Corona Started that
celebrities
 didn't have any idea
to
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 tackle the problem. Nurses and doctors sacrificed and produced vaccines to save the lives of people. ‏To wrap up what was mentioned above, I believe that
although
Celebrities
 are famous and earn huge easy money, Apply in difficult situations, they
could not
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 ‏situation assist society and even they have
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adversely
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 impression.
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coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion can be further developed to provide a clear overview and summary of the main points.
task achievement
Ensure that all the points raised are directly related to the topic and provide a clear opinion on the subject.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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