Some countries have introduced laws to limit working hours for employees. Why are these laws introduced? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Similarly
, while doing my thesis and taking other courses, I gained
knowledge
on climate change issues, which allowed me to understand in-depth the relationship between
this
phenomenon, air quality and,
for example
, the high consumption of non-sustainable energies worldwide.
Therefore
, when researching and analyzing the measures that can be applied to contribute in part to climate change, I observed that the path of
sustainability
and greater implementation of renewable energies would have a positive effect with respect to the emissions that we currently generate. While my
bachelor
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study I worked on a volunteering project where I did the leadership of some areas and contribute
with
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the
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of the project.
This
consisted of making notebooks with recycled paper and other materials in order to donate these products to kids with limited resources in my country, it is very important because as we help kids
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their education, we reduced the number of
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in Bogotá.
Furthermore
, during
college
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I did an academic internship at Telefonica
Colombia
or commercially Movistar in the department of
Sustainability
Management, where I had a positive performance and acquired experience and
knowledge
about corporate
sustainability
focused on the
energy
and telecommunications sector. Following
this
work experience, in 2021 I joined the
company
CI Milpa SA, which is my family
company
and where I currently participate in areas of presidency, environmental management and
energy
projects. Among my work objectives is the creation of the
energy
and environmental departments in the
company
, where I can perform from my
knowledge
in environmental engineering based on the management and public policies that govern us nationally and internationally.
Likewise
, from the
energy
theme, one of the goals is the development and implementation of sustainable
energy
projects, taking into consideration that
Colombia
currently has a high potential for the use of solar and wind
energy
,
in addition
to having about 70% of its
energy
matrix based on hydropower. Considering the above, I believe that the City University of Hong Kong and the program offered by the master’s in science degree in
energy
and environment fits adequately with the learning topics of my interest. Because the curriculum is multidisciplinary and focuses on executing in the practice of industries and companies everything related to
sustainability
. Another point that would be enriching for my career is that the program focuses on analysis and problem solving which I consider a valuable skill to apply in a country like
Colombia
whose political, social, economic, and environmental context is very varied.
Also
, I should mention that I’m looking forward to
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about science and the new technologies about
this
topic in order to develop innovation and Asia is a great leader with
this
knowledge
. For
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it would be an honour to be able to study at one of the best universities with important accreditations, a university that has expertise in the field of environment and
energy
, as well as to be able to meet and learn from faculty members who are leaders in
energy
topics.
Finally
, like many other professionals in the environmental field, I hope through these studies to be able to positively support my
company
and
Colombia
through correct the application of clean and efficient energies and the development of environmental solutions.
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